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[grayrose]

So the first crits of the novelette previously known as Maze start trickling in. I am getting many a "liked" and "enjoyed", but not "loved." There are two great flaws with the story, namely its beginning (wrong place; clunky) and its ending (weak).

I am also getting different comments according to gender. Women insist that Maw gets off too lightly; men are silent on the issue, apparently satisfied?

To-do list:

1. Revamp the beginning. Great advancements have been made! Almost done with this. Where is my medal?
2. Set up Aggriu's ambivalence about the marriage's lasting power
3. Fix the great battle
4. Punish Maw (=fix the ending). MUAHAHAHAH!
Actually I can't punish him. He can't die, he cannot get maimed because he is such an incredibly strong dreamer he would just fix himself unless it's a mortal wound, and, err, his punishment is yet to come (not in this novelette). But I can make his grief more pronounced, and this is what I am going to do.
5. Find a good name for the novelette. Really, Formerly-known-as-Maze is laughable. It's currently called "Three Hearts" (this was the first working title before I came up with "Maze of Hearts"), but I feel it is not memorable enough.

and
6. SLEEP

Comments

[cathellisen.livejournal.com]

Go you!!! Very productive . :D

I liked Maze Of Hearts as a title btw.

Now, get thee to bed.

[grayrose76.livejournal.com]

But does "Maze of Hearts" really work for this novelette?

In my former plot it referred to the Kaddu society, and the baby's name - but both pieces had been cut out in my Great 4K Purge...

[cathellisen.livejournal.com]

My first image that the title gave me (before I knew the baby's name)was of lovers trapped in a labyrinth of their own screwed up issues.

So yeah, it worked for me.

[will-couvillier.livejournal.com]

Awesome! It's always cool making progress on a work!

[southernweirdo.livejournal.com]

The title "Maze of Hearts" worked for me, too.

If you need help on a title, Jim Van Pelt wrote an interesting blog this week concerning titles here: http://jimvanpelt.livejournal.com/123645.html